tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9134015710839672856.post7943655976690599209..comments2014-11-26T12:25:16.164-08:00Comments on Harrison : Homework Week 9Rimu Studenthttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17389483257259220564noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9134015710839672856.post-28448618737935621812014-04-03T17:30:58.176-07:002014-04-03T17:30:58.176-07:00Good solid homework, Harry. I had never heard of a...Good solid homework, Harry. I had never heard of a sausage and lettuce sandwich before! You are very confident giving instructions. My suggestions to improve your film making would be to give an instruction, then fast forward the 'doing' part of the instruction. You could also add text/subtitles to back up each step. Great job on your poem analysis. You need to add a Sound Cloud recording of you reading your poem. I liked the idea of the thirsty Rimu tree and your use of personification. My only feedback would that the wording in line 4, could be adjusted to make the tree sound more thirsty. Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com